April 4, 2007

In worship
I kneel,
bow my head
to your
other one.
I touch
then I
lick, flick, swirl, suck,
all at the same time
until you call out

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  1. Ha. A standing ovation of sorts is well deserved.

  2. iamunedited: glad you enjoyed it

  3. somehow i like the first version of this one.

    i remember smiling to myself the first time i read it. i think wit was more apparent there.

    overflowing with double meanings, i wasn’t quite sure if i was to be glad to have understood it. or ashamed for having interpreted in one way, when there very well was another possible, more socially-acceptable explanation. :p

    then again, maybe it’s just me. that version was more graphic, i guess. and you know how i love graphics. haha. 😉

    (there. a 2nd comment from an uneducated poem-reader :p)

  4. Bravo.

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